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Posted: 2019-04-05T12:02:57+10:00 In:

Reeling from the loss of their eldest son to the war, a family welcomes the company of a mysterious soldier claiming to fulfill a promise to a fallen comrade.

Reeling from the loss of their eldest son to the war, a family welcomes the company of a mysterious soldier claiming to fulfill a promise to a fallen comrade.
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    4 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      Who is the main character? The father? The mother? Or the returned soldier?

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    2. Samurai

      Since this logline is a little vague in parts, some specifics might differentiate this from The Guest. Or there?s room to change parts that give the whole a fresh feel, like a female protag, another kind of family, etc.

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    3. Singularity

      This sounds very similar to the plot of The Guest.

      I would recommend having one protagonist whose perspective we see this story from. Give us the logline from this character’s perspective.?

      Inciting incident – what is the incident that throws the protagonist’s life upside down? I’m assuming that, since it’s a thriller, something dramatic happens that kick starts the real story.

      Goal – when we have a protagonist, give them a clear visual goal that is their answer to the question posed by the inciting incident.?

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    4. Singularity

      Since the promise seems to be important to the story, what is the promise the soldier is vowing to keep?

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