Penpusher
Posted: 2019-03-29T06:12:10+10:00 In:

(REVISED) When his mother is inexplicably resurrected after her ?end-of-life? party, a Christian grief counselor convinces his family it?s a miracle by hiding the truth ? she?s returned with a growing bloodlust.

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    1. Samurai

      Oops is right about the mother-son angle! However, in my defense that may have happened because the logline lacks the meat of the story and what makes it a true family conflict.

      >> why he would spin her return as miraculous.

      Along with the abomination comment, this conflict of miracle vs monster or whatever can be sharper. That the family needs anyone to say it’s a miracle is odd. Or if they’re extreme Christians, perhaps the concern is more about personal taste as such characters are overplayed right now.

      >> a conflict of interest

      That’s before she dies. When she returns, what exactly is the religious issue for him?? At this moment, I can picture? the broadstrokes of a story where a? non-religious family deals with Mom’s resurrection and bloodlust (including? one keeping secrets, at least temporarily, from the rest). Where it gets fuzzy is the Christian part.

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    2. Singularity

      Taking the logline at face value, it says the grief counselor’s objective goal is to hide the truth about his mother.? How exciting is that going to be, to watch someone hide the truth for the duration of the film?

      And hiding the truth is not a proactive effort for a protagonist to engage in.? ?It seems me that hiding the truth is a temporary plot strategy,? not a plot goal.? ?It’s a means to an end, that end being to buy him time to proactively figure out what to do about her blood lust.? ?Which is?

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    3. Singularity

      While this set-up is still interesting. The story is what they do about it.
      I still don’t know who’s the lead character, is it the grief counselor?

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    4. Samurai

      I didn’t follow the first one so this is all new to me.? For the next take…

      Why is a grief counselor needed? For that kind of party, just about everyone is past the worst of the emotions. What’s ironic about him or how does he add? extra conflict?

      Look to create more of a mental picture of what happens in most of the story. Does the mother kill people and the protag covers it up? Is there a revenge aspect? Is it more about preventing a deadly outcome and he? covers up or excuses odd behavior?

      A clearer sense of most of the story should also sharpen the stakes.

      The Christian aspect seems superfluous when they witness the miracle and it’s not like a resurrected person is an abomination.

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