Revised:
A reformed crime lord is living a peaceful life until his wife is kidnapped by his former comrades, where, in order to keep her safe, he must do a list of dark deeds on numerous syndicates or watch his wife’s gruesome demise.
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Revised: A reformed crime lord is living a peaceful life until his wife is kidnapped by his former comrades, where, in order to keep her safe, he must do a list of dark deeds on numerous syndicates or watch his wife’s gruesome demise.
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If you tweak Richiev’s logline, still consider a better sense of irony for the character.? Having been a crime boss makes him well suited to pull off dark deeds,? unless they’re different than what he used to do. A specific one or two can help paint more of the picture.
Will the protag actually commit serious crimes or find ways around them? Different stories and tones.
I’m sorry, my logline attempt isn’t very pro-active, however, I do believe it is a more streamlined version of what you wrote.
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“When his wife is kidnapped, a reformed crimelord if forced complete 10 dark deeds for his former boss or his wife will be killed”?