Logliner
Posted: 2017-05-15T13:51:46+10:00 In:

Surviving the crash of their plane in the Bermuda Triangle, spiritually gifted twins race their evil cyborg uncle to in a quest to find sacred elemental stones to avenge their mother’s murder and save their planet.

Surviving the crash of their plane in the Bermuda Triangle, spiritually gifted twins race their evil cyborg uncle to in a quest to find sacred elemental stones to avenge their mother’s murder and save their planet.
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    1. Singularity

      If the goal is to save the planet, then the inciting incident should be whatever is immediately threatening the planet.

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    2. Logliner

      Wow there is a lot going on there!
      I think i’ll focus on the most glaring issue I have:?How does the plane crash fit into this story? Do they find themselves in the race against the cyborg because their plane crashed? Or would they have ended up in the conflict even if they didn’t??crash? My gut instinct says you could probably omit the whole part about the plane crash and Bermuda and the logline would actually be better for it.

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