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TifaRPenpusher
Posted: January 16, 20192019-01-16T21:03:40+10:00 2019-01-16T21:03:40+10:00In: Fantasy

The coming-of-age stories of a swashbuckling pirate, a rebellious princess, and an adventuring cuisinier.

The coming-of-age stories of a swashbuckling pirate, a rebellious princess, and an adventuring cuisinier.
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      Richiev Singularity
      2019-01-16T23:30:10+10:00Added an answer on January 16, 2019 at 11:30 pm

      Who is the lead character?
      What is their goal?
      What is standing in their way?

      (And what is a cuisinier?)

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      Dkpough1 Uberwriter
      2019-01-16T23:38:04+10:00Added an answer on January 16, 2019 at 11:38 pm

      Please read through the formula tab at the top of the page, and also read through the loglines other people have posted and read through the feedback they receive. Doing this will help you to understand the format and elements of a logline.

      Logline: “The coming-of-age stories of a swashbuckling pirate, a rebellious princess, and an adventuring cuisinier.” (14 words)

      This attempt lacks many of the elements a logline should describe.
      Is this for a film or television series?

      Inciting incident: None described. —> Should describe the event in the story which forces the protagonist into the main conflict.
      Example(Finding Nemo): Marlin’s son, Nemo is? captured.

      Protagonist: “swashbuckling pirate, a rebellious princess, and an adventuring cuisinier.” —> If this is a film, is there one character who gets focused on more? If it’s a television series, is there a character who gets focused on more in the first episode?
      Example: Marlin is the clear protagonist of “Finding Nemo”. Not Dory or any other character. Marlin is the one pursuing the objective goal which drives the story.

      Goal: None described. —> Because of the inciting incident, what must the protagonist set out to accomplish?? What is the climax of the story? The goal should be the objective of what will be accomplished at that point.
      Example: Marlin must find his son Nemo.

      The climax of the story should be an inevitable outcome which comes about because of the inciting incident. The goal should have a causal relationship with the inciting incident. Taking a look at “Finding Nemo”:

      Inciting incident: Nemo is captured.
      Protagonist’s Goal: Find Nemo.
      Climax: Marlin is reunited with his son.

      Antagonist: None described/implied. —> Is there a specific character/group who opposes the protagonist?

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