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CraigDGriffithsUberwriter
Posted: June 5, 20182018-06-05T08:27:50+10:00 2018-06-05T08:27:50+10:00In: Drama

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A father refuses to go on a kidney transplant register for fear his adult daughter will learn she is adopted. She knows but can?t being herself to break his heart.

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    1. variable Uberwriter
      2018-06-05T08:41:26+10:00Added an answer on June 5, 2018 at 8:41 am

      Is it for a short film? Because it might not sustain a feature length plot..

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2018-06-05T09:00:36+10:00Added an answer on June 5, 2018 at 9:00 am

      “When his daughter is diagnosed with kidney diseases,? a distraught father mustn’t offer his kidneys for fear his daughter will discover she’s adopted, not knowing that she’s already has figured it out.”

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    3. Richiev Singularity
      2018-06-05T09:01:46+10:00Added an answer on June 5, 2018 at 9:01 am

      Possible title: I’ll give you the moon

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    4. CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter
      2018-06-05T09:03:51+10:00Added an answer on June 5, 2018 at 9:03 am

      Yep. Badly written. He is the sick one. He is willing to die rather than upset his daughter.

      She knows she is adopted, Mum told her when Mum was dying. But she promised Mum she would keep the secret.

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    5. Richiev Singularity
      2018-06-05T09:08:11+10:00Added an answer on June 5, 2018 at 9:08 am

      From your updated description, it seems as if the daughter is the lead character because she is the one with the moral dilemma. (She must break a promise made to her dying mother, but she can’t break the promise)

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    6. CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter
      2018-06-05T09:21:08+10:00Added an answer on June 5, 2018 at 9:21 am

      It?s a two hander in my head. Dad is being pressured to get the test and go on the register (friends family etc). Daughter is respecting his wishes, because is knows. People are judging her as well.

      Not 100% happy with the ending that?s in my head. She has an accident and that?s when the info comes out and they confess to each other.

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