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To distance himself from overbearing parents, high school freshman Michael Colantino finds himself compelled to create thoughtful hip-hop music in a world that overwhelmed with flashy and uninspired artists. Michael's friend Harry seeks help dealing with a dishonest truck driver.
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Agreed, after some thought I’m losing the hip-hop angle and have came up with following logline for the series:
“Freshmen at Chauncey Vocation High School Frank, Harry and Danny are a group of kindhearted degenerates learning to deal with life in high school.”
What do you think?
Agreed, thanks for your input.
Thanks for your response! I agree that it sounds much better split up. My original thought was that I wanted to create a feel for a series in the logline of the pilot, but I see now that is not what is best.
Also, after much thought I’m going to ditch the hip-hop angle and maybe just make it a running side story.
I have came up with the following series logline:
“Freshmen at Chauncey Vocation High School Frank, Harry and Danny are a group of kindhearted degenerates learning to deal with life in high school”
What do you think?
I think you’re right. Even if the purpose is only to keep myself on track.
It might be easier to comment if people knew the log line of the entire series and then the log line for the episode. Is the log line written how TOAST suggests? The log line for the series will help with the log line of the episode as the episodes should lead towards the overall goal of the series so it would connect but be easier to understand if knew the overall arc of your story.
I think you should write one logline for each story within each episode. Each story should have its own protagonist, goal, obstacles and stakes. In TV the stakes don’t have to be that high, especially the B and C plots.
Heya. To me, it sounds like:
“To distance himself from overbearing parents, high school freshman Michael Colantino finds himself compelled to create thoughtful hip-hop music in a world that overwhelmed with flashy and uninspired artists.” Sounds like the logline for the whole series and
“Michael’s friend Harry seeks help dealing with a dishonest truck driver.” Sounds like the log line for one episode.
I’m also doing a TV series. I’ve been keeping the loglines completely separate (one for the series plus one for each episode) which I find tough as:
– The series has a group of protagonists, and various antagonists.
– Each episode is closer to a single-character arc. (Well, the logline is anyway). Even if an episode has a B-plot and a C-Plot, I’m only putting the A-Plot in the Logline.
I don’t have a definitive answer on this, would love to hear from others.
This is for a television pilot presentation, not a feature film.