Shooting Stars
Tom and Phyllis fall in love soon after she talks him into signing a contract with her network to shoot his death – of a terminal disease – on live TV.
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Wow, this is intriguing! Something I would love to watch. If you are having two protagonists, I’m not sure how you would set up a logline, but if there is one … perhaps something along the lines of …. when phyllis falls in love with Tom after getting him to agree to have his death from cancer filmed live on TV, she has to learn/overcome something … to go through with her original goal … or perhaps it will change ….. I love the title too.
Love the title and idea. If there are two main characters, not sure how to set up a logline .. but if not … perhaps something along the lines of … when Phyllis falls in love with Tom after getting him to agree to have his death from cancer filmed live on TV, she needs to overcome something/learn something to stick with her original goal … or maybe the goal will change …
Solid premise for a story. However:
Unless the characters are famous, using names just confuses the logline and tells us nothing about the characters.
How about this,
“After a no nonsense TV producer convinces a free spirited cancer victim to allow his death to be shown on live TV, complications arise when the two fall in love.”
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
^ I agree with Richiev, in so far as it’s an interesting premise.
But this logline doesn’t work because you don’t tell us what they are going to do now that they have signed the contract. Who is your protagonist – Tom or Phyllis, and what is their goal? I read your logline and get to the end and ask … and then? Where’s the drama? They fall in love after he signs to have his death broadcast on TV … there are no stakes there, no problem. They have made something legal, and it’s gonna be sad when he dies because they’re in love, but the TV producer KNEW THAT GOING IN.
I would suggest making the protagonist the TV producer, the GOAL of the film to get the cancer patient to sign the contract (thus making him, his family, and his community the antagonists), and the love story still plays out as a complication. If this is what you intended, I apologise, but it doesn’t read that way.
You still have the problem of STAKES – WHY would the TV producer need to film the cancer victim’s death on live TV (it’s pretty morbid … but I guess her job could depend on it?) But I do like the idea of a character who is so desensitised by the world at the beginning thinking that this is a really great idea, and as she falls in love with and gets to know the victim, he opinion on the whole thing changes. So I think it’s got legs.