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marco_on_the_shorePenpusher
Posted: May 29, 20192019-05-29T21:18:23+10:00 2019-05-29T21:18:23+10:00In: Thriller

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    1. dpg Singularity
      2019-05-29T21:39:09+10:00Added an answer on May 29, 2019 at 9:39 pm

      Who leads the trio?? Who is the alpha-character?? Whoever that is probably should be the designated protagonist and the logline should be written to focus on that character.

      >>>their goals

      Goals, plural?? Aren’t the trio striving for the same goal?? A plot is about the pursuit of a singular goal, even when it involves multiple characters.

      And? how does “unusual espionage assignment” translate into a concrete, objective goal?? For the purpose of a logline “unusual” isn’t really unusual? because it’s SOP in a thriller for the protagonist to be tasked with an “unusual” assignment.? The objective goal needs to be spelled out.? Be specific. One cannot assume that logline readers are familiar with the book so as to know what the assignment is.? Nor that they will take the effort and time to read the book to find out.? ?For the genre,? the “unusual” assignment is the “game ball ” (as Blake Snyder of “Save the Cat!” fame put it) and a logline needs to show the game ball — not hide it.

      >>>They parted ways when they were children, and only in the strange reality of 1Q84 do they have a chance to find each other again.

      That’s back story, hence extraneous to a logline.? A logline is about the story looking forward in time, not looking back.

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2019-05-29T21:32:22+10:00Added an answer on May 29, 2019 at 9:32 pm

      Just curious, who is the lead character, what is their goal, and what is standing in their way?

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