After her fathers death a trash-talking Brooklynite takes her family?s obsolete private detective agency into the modern age with the power of a smartphone. (Episodic Series)
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After her fathers death a trash-talking Brooklynite takes her family?s obsolete private detective agency into the modern age with the power of a smartphone. (Episodic Series)
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>>>using social media to solve her cases
This is similar to? the CBS drama “Crowdsourcing”.? Which is a American knockoff of an Israeli series. So there’s that problem in terms of coming with a differentiating gimmick for a new series.
The logline/pitch for “Crowdsourcing” was:? “Inspired by the notion that a million minds are better than one, a tech innovator creates a cutting edge crowdsourcing hub to solve his own daughter?s murder, as well as revolutionizing crime solving.?
Notice that there is a specific inciting incident for launching the series in the pilot episode.? And it’s personal😕 the protagonist wants to solve the murder of his own daughter. I suggest one takeaway is that your protagonist needs a strong inciting incident and motivation, something more dramatic? than the fact that she happens to work in the family business.
Oh, and in loglines character descriptions — yes; character names — no.?
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How does “taking the PI business in a fresh direction” play out in terms of a specific objective goal?? What is the inciting incident in the pilot episode that triggers her to pursue that goal?
Laughingfire,
You need to familiarize yourself with the rules of this page and the story structure of the logline found here:
https://loglines.org/howto/
Good luck.