Two gay couple face religious governmental charges for being gay in a third world country and their sentence is death by stoning, but both believe there is a way out.
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Two gay couple face religious governmental charges for being gay in a third world country and their sentence is death by stoning, but both believe there is a way out.
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That is the situation, what they will do about it is the story. A logline describes story not situation.
“When two gay couples are sentenced to death by sharia law, they must..” (then tell us what they must do)
As Richiev said, the logline needs a goal. Without a goal, there is no plot and the primary function of a logline is to convey a plot.
Secondly is there a need for the multiple protagonists? It doesn’t read as such, therefore I suggest specifying one character as the main character.
I agree that the logline needs a goal, but I don’t see why the logline needs to single out one character over another. ?The story is about a couple ?fighting for their relationship, for love. They are equal participants in the struggle, equal stakeholders in the outcome.
Just as in “Brokeback Mountain”, the two gay cowboys are equal participants and equal stake holders in their struggle to define their relationship in the homophobic culture of the rural West.
Thank you guys, I’ll work on it.
Cheers