Vowlence- In the year 2050, matrimony’s perfect success rate is challenged when a “created” spouse falls for someone other than her creator and falls in love with having a choice.
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Vowlence- In the year 2050, matrimony’s perfect success rate is challenged when a “created” spouse falls for someone other than her creator and falls in love with having a choice.
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While a clearly defined goal is appreciated, it seems you’re on your way to a very interesting story already.
This LogLine has irony and cost, but fails to define a specific audience. If I knew who this was being marketed too I may have a different view on it’s relevance.
Good luck and good writing!
This could work, a science fiction version of, “The Scarlet Letter”
It would help, as pointed out above, if the lead had a goal.
“In the year 2050, matrimony?s perfect success rate is challenged when a ?created? spouse falls for someone other than her creator and falls in love with having a choice.”
While this is an interesting idea, the logline doesn’t describe any visual action and it doesn’t describe the goal of the protagonist. As a result of falling in love with someone she isn’t supposed to, what does this lead her to do?
Another interesting?idea but it needs building out. ?It sets up a situation, a framework for a plot, ?but it does lay out a plot.
?And who exactly is the protagonist, the creator or the creature? And how do you plan to divvy up the roles? ?Which sex is the creator? ?Which one is the created?
(I think it would be interesting to reverse the dominant role of the sexes; instead of patriarchal creators, have matriarchal creators. ?In keeping with the primary biological function of their sex.)