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xxunmercifulxxPenpusher
Brought together by chance an unwonted romance blooms between an affluent twenty-something and a down on his luck mendicant.
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What makes the romance unwanted? Just curious because this would be the main conflict of the story.
Like Richiev says.? ?Taking the logline at face value, it says the they meet accidentally and fall in love .? End of film.? Which is to say, that those elements by themselves aren’t enough? for a romantic film.? There needs to be wedge issue that threatens to drive them apart.? Or a seemingly insurmountable barrier that stands between their living happily ever after.
Like in “Romeo and Juliet”.? The star-crossed lovers meet accidentally and immediately fall in love.? But there’s a problem:? they belong to families that are waging a bloody feud.? There is no way their parents will allow them to marry. And as a further complication (with a ticking clock), Juliet’s father betroths her to another man.
There’s the possibility of? wedge issue or barrier arising from the fact that one is rich, the other is poor.? But? the logline doesn’t explicitly say it is a source of conflict or a? ?barrier.
When? Era or Genre perhaps. What happens when they fall in love?
There just isn?t any meat to eat on these bones.
This could also be the logline for:
Titanic, Mystic Pizza, Aladdin or any number of films. The detail is what makes them different.
There doesn’t seem to be anything for these characters to gain other than each other. If that is true, the movie wouldn’t have any legs to stand on. If you add some kind of struggle or force or goal that would make one character actively pursue the other, then you’ve created something for the audience to latch on to. Without that, the movie would just be characters doing random things until they fall in love, if you create some tension, the relationship of your characters becomes more realistic.
For a start, what is the wedge issue that threatens to destroy the relationship?? What is the seemingly insurmountable obstacle? that stands in the way?