A hardcore gamer meets the girl of his dreams who just so happens to hold the key to his inexplicable fear of the dark.

Also, the character needs…. some character. The logline presents him as weak, passive and dependent; it says that the key to overcoming his inner subjective problem lies outside himself, in another person.

Now a character can have a subjective problem , a flaw, and the love interest can help him overcome it. ?But the key to his overcoming his fear of the dark must be located ?within himself, not in another person. ?He just needs to find it and use it. ?That’s his character arc.

But why does he need to overcome his fear of the dark? ?What urgent, desperately desired outer objective goal does he need to achieve and the only way he can is by overcoming his inner flaw?