The Final Solution
Rutger OosterhoffLogliner
Based on true events. “On holiday, a vain German Luftwaffe officer and his family forget to disembark their train and end up in a Nazi dead camp, not keen on uninvited visitors.?
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You want to be a bit careful here. Some might find ‘harmless Arians’ an oxymoron and quite offensive.
The proper English term would not be Arians but Aryans. In quotes, “Aryans”, perhaps, to indicate it refers to the bogus Nazi’s ideology of racial superiority.
And more than just being harmless, they are loyal (in contrast to disloyal Germans).
I had to find a way to keep the logline at 28 words hinting at ‘why’ the Luftwaffe officer and his family are a danger to the technisions of the death camp, without having to use the phrase “to save their lives”.
The sarcasm in picturing harmless Arians:
(1) Luftwaffe officer and his family saving their lives by being harmless Arians. Not’ baring witness’ of the genocide in the Dead camp.
(2) Do harmless Arians exist?!
(3) I the death camp — Harmless Arians -opposite to- mass Murdering Arians
(In WW2 the enemy only realy respected Luftwaffe officers. This being a legacy of the WW1- the Red Baron etc.)
That’s exactly what I want to picture. The only problem using the word “harmless” is that it does not hint at the officer and his family being a problem for the the technicians of the death camp.
An interesting concept here – my first thoughts were similar to the comments already BUT I get what you are trying to put across – I ‘assume’ that the theme here will be his increasing struggle against his nazi beliefs as he himself is placed in the horror of a death camp, and sees the ‘enemy’ as a human person(s), and his allies as the enemy…all whilst trying to save his own family.
Perhaps ‘zealous’ commander instead of over ambitious? The word is harsher.
Perhaps some rearranging:
When a decorated Luftwaffe officer and his family are placed in a Nazi death camp, he must convince a zealous camp commander of the horrific mistake whilst having all of his beliefs challenged.
Something along those lines….also the opportunity for a grand twist…I recently saw a documentary where it was revealed (through DNA) that Eva Braun was in fact of Jewish descent – the final irony!
When a vain Luftwaffe officer and his family accidently end up in a Nazi death camp, he must convince the overambitious camp commandant to spare their lives.?
Who is the hero? A vain Luftwaffe officer
Who is the antagonist? An overambitious camp commandant
What is the Quest? To convince the camp commandant to spare their lives
What is the hero?s flaw? He?s selfish
Where is the conflict? Stay ALIVE in a DEATH camp with an overambitious camp commandant
What?s at stake? The Aryan families lives —- them exposing a horrible truth
Genre: Dude with a Problem ?meets- Whydunit
We all know that evil lurks in the hearts of men. Greet happens. Murder happens. And unseen evildoers are responsible for it all. But the who? is never as interesting as the why?. Blake Snyder ? Save the Cat
Whydunit is in this story: ?During or after the war, the Luftwaffe officer and/or his family will not bare witness of the genocide in the death camp.
What is the tone? Black irony
Irony:
A obvious Aryan (he still wears his uniform whitch he loves) must convince the camp commandant (a) they are not Jews (b) they will not bare witness of the genocide in the death camp.
Killer title:
The Final Solution is also the ?final solution? for the, camp commandant, Franz Stangl his problem what to do with Aryans that can bare witness of the death camps genocide on Jews and Gipsies.?
Audience and cost:
Audience
For those who:
? dont believe it ever happened (O0o0oh how wrong you can be)
? know it happened (those innocent lives lost ? to give them a voice)
? might have forgotten (least we CONTINUE to repeat history over and over again)
? need to learn from our history (people the world over, need to know)
? think it couldnt happen to them ( the Jews didnt want to believe that the Germans would be so cruel ? manny more possibly couldve been saved had they truly thought their lives were in danger)
For those who think its STILL not happening in our world ( remember Rwanda? the Sudan? Kenya? Who?s next?..YOU? )
? Source: mssinmymind https://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20080521224855AAumbL4
Cost: To much?!!!
At least 3 locations, not to talk about (a) how to get a vintage train (with little costs) (b) Treblinka does not exist anymore. There is nothing. Treblinka was destroyed by those who had built it and replaced with trees and shrubs. This means computer generation of still existing images (of Treblinka?s camp 1 and 2) in production phase? Pre-production? Using Blue screen, this often sucks. What did they do in other low budget (Hollywood) movies? Making a movie under 10 million dollars is near impossible I think. An example
:
Fateless (Sorstalans?) (2005)
Country: Hungary
costs : $ 12.000.000 gross: $ 195.888 dollars 8.125.750
Filming locations:
Paks, Hungary
Budapest, Hungary *
Duna?jv?ros, Hungary
F?t Studios, Budapest, Hungary
Piliscsaba, Hungary
WEAKNESS:
1. Why not immediately kill the family if they represent a clear and present danger?
The commandant finds himself in a unique situation, and thereby he?s not sure what to do; making a big mistake could cost him his job?
2. It has no clear end. Hmmm, here we really have to keep the little suspense we have.
Choose as the right answer
yes, I get what you mean Jax, but there is no grand twist, they must die so they can not bare witness of the genocide during and/or after the war.
My question arising:
– How could they end up in a KZ camp accidentally? Sadly there were always very particular reasons why someone was sent into a KZ camp. Political, religious, sexual orientation, disabilities. It is also a very very sensitive topic. I would need some clue in the logline on the nature of the accident or how they got mixed up. Sure there is a reason explored if there is a real event behind.
You are right Gabor, but I have to look that up again in the book Treblinka. Something went wron at Malkinia station/junction. If i remember correctly tey forgot to disembark their train Malkinia station. In an older version this was in the logline.
“During World War II, a railway line, called the Malkinia-Siedlce line, ran directly east from Warsaw to Malkinia Junction. The Treblinka extermination camp was located 4 km or 2.5 miles southeast of the Malkinia Junction. The Germans built a spur line from the junction into the Treblinka camp and train cars were backed into the camp, 20 cars at a time.’
The logline must be somewhere inbetween 25 and 35 words, I want to stay as close to 27 words as possible without leaving vital information out of the logline
Synopsis:
A German Luftwaffe officer, his wife, daughter and two sons travel by train to their holiday destination ? the village of Treblinka. They forget to disembark at Malkinia station and end up in Treblinka concentration camp. Now they must convince the camp commander to spare their lives.?
Logline:
Based on true events On holiday, a vain German Luftwaffe officer and his family forget to disembark their train and end up in a Nazi dead camp, not keen on uninvited visitors.?
Hi Rutger, I think what you wrote as synopsis is just the right one!! I don’t think anyone would ban it because of the number of words.
Thanks Gabor, maybe in a better world…