This is a heavily revised version of my earlier original logline that I shared here from 2017.
Original:
“On the verge of a succession crisis, a good mermaid princess is banished from her kingdom to the human world for her forbidden love of humans; but when her two wicked sisters usurp their father’s throne and destroy each other in a power struggle to rule the kingdom alone, she must choose between humanity and saving her people from the tyranny of her sisters.”
It’s a big ocean out there, added “Atlantis” to envision her home and showdown.
Make this yours, leaning towards:
“A banished mermaid princess must return to the sea in order to save Atlantis from her tyrannical sisters”
Keep going, take care.
Snap, “merprincess” is a thang – per Wiki 😉
“A banished merprincess must return to the sea in order to save Atlantis from her tyrannical sisters”
But is it an improvement from my original version?
From the original, yes, but I would keep “tyrannical” for the sisters in your current – since kingdom centric.
I don’t think most people would know what a “merprincess” is though. Thanks for you feedback.