This is a heavily revised version of my earlier original logline that I shared here from 2017.
Original:
“On the verge of a succession crisis, a good mermaid princess is banished from her kingdom to the human world for her forbidden love of humans; but when her two wicked sisters usurp their father’s throne and destroy each other in a power struggle to rule the kingdom alone, she must choose between humanity and saving her people from the tyranny of her sisters.”
I don’t think most people would know what a “merprincess” is though. Thanks for you feedback.
It’s a big ocean out there, added “Atlantis” to envision her home and showdown.
Make this yours, leaning towards:
“A banished mermaid princess must return to the sea in order to save Atlantis from her tyrannical sisters”
Keep going, take care.
But is it an improvement from my original version?
From the original, yes, but I would keep “tyrannical” for the sisters in your current – since kingdom centric.
Snap, “merprincess” is a thang – per Wiki 😉
“A banished merprincess must return to the sea in order to save Atlantis from her tyrannical sisters”