Breaking Bad
Andrew BatesLogliner
When a high school chemistry teacher struggling financially is diagnosed with cancer and health insurance wont cover the cost of treatment, he turns to cooking and selling crystal meth to secure a financial future for his family
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Nailed it.
it’s a bit long tho, isn’t it? What happened to 25 words?
When a chemistry teacher gets terminal cancer and insurance won’t cover the treatment he turns to cooking crystal meth to secure his family financially…
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I don’t like ‘family financially’ tho…
When a chemistry teacher gets terminal cancer and insurance won?t cover the treatment he turns to cooking crystal meth to secure his family’s future…
I think we can get it’s about finances without stating it…can we ?
Or…
When a chemistry teacher gets terminal cancer and insurance won’t cover the treatment he turns to cooking crystal meth…
(isn’t that in itself intriguing?)
My original logline is long.
just refering to the above logline “he turns to cooking crystal meth” doesn’t sit right, sounds like he’s turning to drugs and not saying why…
When a chemistry teacher struggling financially is diagnosed with cancer and health insurance wont cover treatment, he turns to cooking and selling crystal meth to secure his family’s future
great, altho I think we can lose ‘and selling’ ( we can guess that, if he’s cooking and he’s doing it for his family’s future).
Actually, originally he starts to cover the costs of the treatment right – $70,000 ? His family’s future comes later…
We could also lose ‘struggling financially’ – we gather that if he has to start cooking meth to cover the treatment – it’s stating things twice….
so…
When a chemistry teacher is diagnosed with cancer and health insurance won’t cough up, he notches up a recipe for the purest ice on the planet, to cover the costs…
breaking bad bitch!!