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kcguruLogliner
When a high school reunion brings together a group of female friends, they use the night to complete their unfinished and outdated high school bucket list before they part ways again.
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kcguru:
Another thought. If it’s an ensemble story you want to tell (versus focusing on one main character) than the bucket lists can’t be all about doing the same thing.? Ensemble plots work best when they involve stories told in counterpoint, that is, with complementary and contrasting story threads playing off each other and? oriented around one central theme.
One too-obvious story thread is about a character who takes a risk or breaks a rule she didn’t have the guts to take as a teen.? Okay, but that would be more effectively told if played against a story thread about a character who had the guts to take all kinds of risks, break all the rules in high school — and now she wants to make amends for the damage her reckless behavior caused.
fwiw
To Take dpg’s idea as a baseline:
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“When her best friend from highschool reveals she has cancer, a wild child turned respectable mom uses the 25th highschool reunion to reunite the old gang and help their dying friend complete her highschool bucket list.”
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Of course, your logline would be different, but this logline example uses dpg’s critique, and adds and inciting incident (The ‘why now’ of the story) gives a time frame and adds a serious undertone to the possible comedic premise.
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TP an old rival’s house.
Smoke a joint on the roof
Streak through the school
Kiss the guy she never had the courage to kiss
Tell off the mean vice principal
Go to prom
(in fact, a very good scene could be when the friends recreate the prom their dying friend missed and surprise her; not only with the dance, but have her old flame in a tux as her prom date)
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The premise is interesting but I suggest it needs clarity and focus.
What reunion? is it — the 10th… 25th… 50th?? If the last one, there is urgency — time is running out.? If the 10th,? not so much.? IOW: why must they do it NOW after all these years?
How large is the group?? If the premise is conceived as an ensemble, the logline needs to? indicate how many major roles must be cast.? That is need-to-know information for movie makers.
They must check off all the items in one night??? Or…? How many items are on the bucket list?
What’s at stake?? What makes the bucket list so important to them?? What do they stand to gain if they succeed?? Lose if they fail?
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