Penpusher
Posted: 2019-12-25T13:22:06+10:00 In:

When a misogynistic Indian husband loses his IT job, he is forced to work in a team reporting to his wife in her organisation, to pay for mortgage.

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    1. Best Answer
      Logliner

      One little thing that may add is to specify what his wife’s company is – for example – is it some sort of feminine manufacturing product, or cleaning service or something that would also conflict with his conception of being a man. Otherwise, sounds like a good idea.

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      Samurai

      My initial thoughts are that you can tighten up the logline more, without losing much if anything:

      When a misogynistic IT worker loses his job, he is forced to work for his wife to pay the bills.

      Nothing else seems important.? The only thing is, while there is certainly some implied conflict there, I think there can be more building tension.? I’d suggest exploring ideas that make it seem like more is at stake for the man… maybe it’s a dream project, and he just needs to behave for a month.? Or maybe it’s more of a competition, where he’s going to sabotage his wife’s efficiency, so they realize he’s better and he maybe even gets his old job back.

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      Singularity

      I like the built-in conflict based on the lead character’s personality.

      You can drop, “Due to recession,” if you want to tighten the logline a little, (Don’t drop it in the story, just the logline)

      Also if being forced to work for his wife causes the lead to have a goal I think that would help the logline.

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