Another try on my original log-line.
Title: Whistle While She Works
SteeldownunderPenpusher
When a persistent novice realtor discovers her condescending boss is bankrolling his fancy lifestyle using client escrow funds, she hires an investigator to dig deeper, but he catches on and hires a hit-man to silence her.
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Richiev’s and Scott’s versions work well. Only thing I’d consider changing is giving her a characteristic that suggests an arc for her.
“When her boss hires a hitman after she discovers he’s embezzled millions, a novice realtor, must survive the assassination attempts while searching for the smoking gun that will put her boss away.”
I think this reads a bit better:
When she discovers her boss has embezzled millions, a novice realtor must evade his hitman while searching for the smoking gun that will put him away.
Hi Richiev,
Nicely done, that’s a great way to look at it. I had not thought of that angle; it works! thank you! ‘Steeldownunder