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channell9Penpusher
Posted: June 8, 20162016-06-08T11:38:07+10:00 2016-06-08T11:38:07+10:00In: Drama

When a prison gate is accidentally left open, a young female inmate must find a way to get to the gate and get her chance at freedom.

When a prison gate is accidentally left open, a young female inmate must find a way to get to the gate and get her chance at freedom.
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    1. Richiev Singularity
      2016-06-08T12:12:10+10:00Added an answer on June 8, 2016 at 12:12 pm

      The logline is pretty good. As for internal story logic, I do wonder how an inmate who obviously isn’t near the open gate, finds out about the gate being open, but the guards don’t.

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2016-06-08T13:26:57+10:00Added an answer on June 8, 2016 at 1:26 pm

      Richiev ?puts a finger on a problem with the logic of the premise. ?It’s somewhat plausible that she has a window of opportunity to escape ?for a few minutes wherein the guards don’t realize the gate is ajar. ?But for 30, 60, 90 minutes? ?That is difficult to believe, particularly if the time setting is contemporary, when prisons are rigged with sensors to detect and alarms to signal failures to secure gates. ? And how would she be in a position to realize the gate is open — but not one guard would be?

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    3. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2016-06-08T15:41:41+10:00Added an answer on June 8, 2016 at 3:41 pm

      Could it be that the prisoner sees?a breach in the fencing or a large rodent hole that runs under the prison wall instead of an open gate? Then they could devise a plan to break out without risking the guards finding out about the breach of security.?

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    4. DylanK Logliner
      2016-06-09T01:13:26+10:00Added an answer on June 9, 2016 at 1:13 am

      For me the main thing missing is the ticking clock.

      I understand that it’s implied because this is a prison and no gate would remain unlocked for long. ?But as stated above that raises it’s own problems. ?Just as dpg stated, ?I ?wonder how this mistake would go unnoticed for the 70-90 minutes needed for this film?

      That said, I feel like the discovery of the unlocked gate, and the planning on the fly (as apposed to preplanning) if what will make this movie fly. ?So as a log line reader, what I want to know is, how long does she have until that gate is closed and maybe a little bit more about why she noticed it unlocked an no one else did.

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