Crime College (no title yet)
ShadowPenpusher
?When a rookie undercover officer mistakenly finds himself admitted to a college that trains criminals, he will have to play a balancing act in order to please his superiors and prove he's one of the guys.?
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Good premise for a comedy.
I would suggest to research similar films such as 21 Jump Street. I think better to make it so his commanding officer admits him to the college undercover. This way it is out of his control and he is also faced with a the same dilemmas of other such stories. He develops friendships in the college and wants to protect his new found friends but also must stay loyal to his police captain.
After a rookie cop is assigned to an undercover operation as a student in a college for criminals he must protect his fellow students whilst at the same time bust the head teacher a criminal master mind.
Perhaps also add in some heightened stakes. Make it obvious what will happen if he fails.
Hope this helps.
When a rookie police officer finds himself admitted to a college that trains criminals, he will have to play a balancing act in order to both hide his situation from his superiors and prove he is one of the guys.?
I think it would be way more interesting if his superiors know nothing about what’s going on but they are investigating the college and the protagonist is on the team that’s investigating the college. That way he has to balance being a student and learning and befriending all these criminals and at the same time trying to not give himself away to the other police officers.
The line “He will have to play a balancing act” doesn’t really tell us anything and should be dropped.
When a rookie undercover officer mistakenly finds himself admitted to a college that trains criminals, he will have to prove he’s one of the guys.? -possibly add- (If he’s to discover the mastermind behind the school)
Hope that helps, good luck with this!
Why doesn’t he want to let the people whom he works for and with know he’s enrolled?
What is the purpose of his “balancing act”; that is, what is his objective goal?
What’s at stake: what does he stand to gain if he succeeds? What will he lose if he fails?
And what’s the genre? A cop/crime comedy or a cop/crime drama?
Your intentions of adding plot thickeners, in my mind, add confusion. Best to simplify it to a single clear sequence of events.
What is his single goal? What are the stakes? The notion of keeping some of his actions secret form some of the characters and some of not shouldn’t be in the logline at all. Let that develop as a derivative of a well constructed plot in the outline or treatment.
Perhaps,
?When a rookie undercover cop, mistakenly finds himself trapped in a college for criminals, he must balance his need to please his superiors, yet prove he’s one of the guys.?