After getting kicked out of school, permanently. A young thirsty for notoriety Brooklyn native DJ Kamilah Atiyeh wanting to become New York’s hottest mixer, seeks mentor and guidance from her longtime best friend Serenity Jones from the Bronx who got major notoriety and connects in the southern part of New York. Serenity tests Kamilah to lay out a full beat in 15 hours, for one of her colleages remix in order to prove and to put her on her team. All a while teaches Kamihla how to build and make her mark in New York, with swag, and power. But with power comes problems when friendships are tested between Kamilah and a Bronx born DJ named JazZy B once friends with. and that one wanting that same spot on top and jealousy sparks a heated feud.
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When a self proclaimed DJ chases after power and notoriety, with the help of her best friend and mentor, she must try to keep her thrown in tact from the enviousness of another DJ even if that means going beyond her moral beliefs.
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“After she’s expelled from school, a thirsty Brooklynite pursues her dream of becoming New Yorks hottest DJ but must face off against a former friend who’ll stop at nothing to keep the DJ crown firmly on his own head.”
Not sure what you mean by “thrown in tact…” Also, why is she a self-proclaimed DJ, aren’t all DJ’s pretty much DJ’s because they say so?
I honestly used a poor word choice on that matter, I should have put something like a “confident but arrogant DJ” a better adjective would had suffice since self proclaimed is referencing self, so you’re right!! And thrown in tact I meant mainly her shining moment in place from being overthrown again, probably bad word choice haha, thanks for the critique and review mate.
Sounds good. Wonder if you can shorten it. Maybe leave out the middle piece between the commas. And add some detail about the moral challenge.
Thanks, you are right!!! That be the HARDEST is keeping it short but descriptive with the challenge involved the character has to face. Something I’ll definitely take in consideration, thank you.