Penpusher
Posted: 2018-02-28T09:45:31+10:00 In:

When a team of employees learns that a once in a lifetime redundancy is being offered to one of them, a lone employee encourages the others to demonstrate their willingness to be the one retrenched. In the process, the team learns more about who their colleagues really are for them

When a team of employees learns that a once in a lifetime redundancy is being offered to one of them, a lone employee encourages the others to demonstrate their willingness to be the one retrenched. In the process, the team learns more about who their colleagues really are for them
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    4 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      Possible title: The Upside of Downsizing

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    2. Singularity

      “When they are told, due to downsizing, one of them will be fired but receive?a 400k severance?check, five, hardworking, lifetime employs suddenly vie to see who can be the most useless.”

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    3. Singularity

      I am a little confused by the term “a once in a lifetime redundancy”
      Not sure what that means in practical terms.
      However, it sounds interesting

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    4. Singularity

      I like this premise as a comedy, but it’s is too long and lacks a few major beats. First I would start by identifying one of the team as the main character, then I would rewrite the logline from his or her point of view. It sounds like the MC’s goal would be to get retrenched, if this is the case, the inciting incident would need to directly motivate him or her to become the one.

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