Logliner
Posted: 2017-06-24T13:29:00+10:00 In:

After saving an mistreated puppy, a young doctor sets out forming new friendships, helping those in need.

After saving an mistreated puppy, a young doctor sets out forming new friendships, helping those in need.
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    6 Reviews

    1. Penpusher

      Mostly, I’m left with questions – can you give us a taste of those adventures? Like one or two highlights? Is there a reason the doctor connects with the puppy and adopts him?

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    2. Singularity

      Story is conflict.

      Is there a main conflict in your story that you could present in your logline?

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    3. Uberwriter

      After saving an abused puppy, a young doctor sets out to help the others in need.

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    4. Uberwriter

      A script-and a logline- should be about what the character is doing NOW. What is the conflict, what is the specific goal? Is there a specific patient he wishes to save?

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    5. Singularity

      What Richiev wrote.

      What is it the doctor wants specifically, why, and what’s stopping him or her from getting it?

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    6. Logliner

      I’ve got the setup: “When a young doctor finds a mistreated puppy” however, everything else is fluff that doesn’t mean anything.

      Who’s lives do they save, or what kind anyway, and why should I be interested?

      What do you actually mean by “forming friendships and living life to the fullest?”

      It’s a good setup. There are endless possibilities and directions you could take this story, but I would start with that setup, and then consider the story (conflict) you want to tell is.

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