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Posted: 2016-03-11T19:26:41+10:00 In:

When a young urban explorer meets her new boyfriend, she will discover secret locations that could change space and time.

When a young urban explorer meets her new boyfriend, she will discover secret locations that could change space and time.
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    1. Singularity

      As FFF asked:? what is the main conflict?

      A logline?should be?a?summary of a plot.? This logline sets up a potentially interesting situation –?but, alas,??not?a plot.??? The plot is about what happens after she discovers the secret locations.? What dramatic problem or threat is created by her discovery?? What must she do about it?

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    2. Mentor

      Hello,
      this is too vague in my opinion : “secret locations that could change space and time” (what does it mean?).
      secondly, is there a link between what appears to be the inciting incident (meeting the new boyfriend) and the discovery of the new secret location? If so, it could be specified what is the link because it is not clear.
      What is the main conflict that fuel the story and what his the main character’s goal?

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