When an article about a genetically abnormal blue watermelon surfaces, the world’s most misunderstood (and only) super-villain goes on a journey to find it and prove his humanity before the FBI resorts to drastic measures to stop him once and for all.

How does finding the blue watermelon prove his humanity? If he’s the only super-villain then by default he’s the most misunderstood… and the world’s most understood. Super-villains need super heroes to oppose them. The FBI can’t be all it takes to stop him. But why do they want to stop him? All he wants to do is find a blue watermelon.

I think there are a lot of components to this logline that need more cohesion. A reader should have a clear idea of the whole film, start to finish, when they read a logline. The inciting incident and the goal should be very closely related – the inciting incident should be the event that turns the protagonist’s life upside down and sets up his goal of correcting it again.

Have you seen Megamind or Despicable Me? Both have similar premises to this and are good examples of how you can use a super villain as a protagonist to comedic effect.