When an aspiring writer blogs anonymously about her dates, one of them finds out who she is and continues dating her in order to improve his dating style to ask out someone else.
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When an aspiring writer blogs anonymously about her dates, one of them finds out who she is and continues dating her in order to improve his dating style to ask out someone else.
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The logline, as written, is vague on who the lead character is. It begins as if the blogger is the lead character then halfway it switches perspectives to the guy she is dating.
I would re-write it something like this:
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“When he discovers he’s dating a famous relationship blogger, a habitual ‘Mr. wrong’, realizes this is the perfect chance to get pointers on his dating style but his plans go awry when he begins falling in love.”
Richiev’s version makes it a re-tooling of the premise of the 2005 Will Smith film, “Hitch”. ? ?Well, maybe.
Richiev is ?correct that the standard complication for a story of this genre is for the protagonist to unexpectedly fall in love with the person with whom he starts a relationship with on the wrong foot (aka: they “meet cute”). After all, it is a romance.
And why would she continue to accept dates with him if some positive alchemy wasn’t developing in her mind in spite of her him two thumbs down reviews?
So yeah, the logline would benefit from a polish that includes a romantic complication.
This kind of sounds like all single men – go out with one woman, if it doesn’t go well try try again…
What is the ‘hook’? What about this stands out from the large number of other romance stories?
Not sure how his actions make an audience want to go see the movie at home or the theater.
Sorry for the negativity, simply being totally honest.