My Reward
When an extremely devoted woman learns of her husband's infidelity from a neighbor, she becomes devastated and determines to make confirmations, terminate the marriage and take from him what he cherishes most – their kids.
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Make it shorter. Cut out the neighbor, cut out extremely cut out the confirmations, if there is some obstacle (money, parents, feelings etc) that prevents her from just taking her kids then mention that. Also I don’t see a character flaw from the wife.
Try to create more conflict. If the conflict is her getting proof or working up the nerve then mention that but you already listed her resolve to leave him and take the kids so it doesn’t seem like a conflict. (which is also why I said cut the confirmations out)
The neighbor doesn’t seem important.
Other than that I think you are on your way to creating an engaging drama.
A woman divorces her husband and takes the kids.
How did you come up with such a creative concept?
That’s a bit sour jeez lol. At least offer a way to help.
Okay, “woman divorces her husband” doesn’t seem like a big enough issue to pin a whole movie around to me – but would I be correct in guessing that TX comes from a country or culture where it *is* a big deal for a woman to initiate divorce and take the kids?
If so, TX, you have two options. Setting this story in a culture or country where divorce is less easy or common, and where there’s an assumption the man gets the best deal out of it even if he was in the wrong, will give your story strong stakes immediately.
Or: if this is going to happen in US/Europe/ other culture where divorce is less of a big deal, you need to raise the stakes dramatically. She starts the divorce and takes the kids, BUT her husband kidnaps the kids/tries to kill her/frames her and her sent to jail… Something.
Thanks for the feedbacks i’ve received so far, i must confess i’m overwhelmed by it all. I guess the word “terminate the marriage” is a bit confusing as the emphasis i’m trying to make is not on divorce but on the woman ending the marriage in some other way, probably by dumping the husband and hurting the children along the line. I think i just need to convey the message with more clarity, but thanks all the same.