When an LA homicide detective uncovers a corporate conspiracy to use clones as assassins and is framed for murder, she must track down her own duplicate to prove her innocence.
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When an LA homicide detective uncovers a corporate conspiracy to use clones as assassins and is framed for murder, she must track down her own duplicate to prove her innocence.
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A homicide detective with Narcissistic personality disorder is framed for murder after she happens on a corporation’s diabolical clone assassin program. ?Now she has 4 days to track down her double and prove her innocence.
This is very intriguing. ?Murder Mysteries are nothing new but the addition of a Sci-Fi element gives it something special. ?I am drawn the the character and can already get a sense of the desperation she might feel as she fights to clear her name.
Nice rewrite, yqwertz. ?It is concise and establishes ?why the syndicate is framing the detective. ?That facilitates my buying into the story.
Yes, the syndicate is made up of many so who is the principal antagonist? It doesn’t matter. It’s a mystery genre film so it does not need to be revealed — should not be revealed — in a logline. ?It’s part of the mystery to be solved , to find out who is running the syndicate. ?Who really wants her discredited and removed?
Just as in “Chinatown”. ?Gittes initially thinks he’s going up against unidentified “bad guys” — a corporate cabal — ?who are out to control the water supply. ?Not until the last Act comes the Big Reveal, that’s he up against just?one bad guy.
My slight tweak (to have a 2nd beat on the word “clone”, the hook):
After a detective uncovers a syndicate using clones as assassins, she is framed for murder and must find her clone to prove her innocence.
(24 words, 137 characters — Twitter friendly)
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I like the concept. Here is a rephrasing that fits in the 25 word standard.
When a detective unearths a syndicate using clones as assassins, she is framed for murder and must find her own duplicate to prove her innocence. (25 words)
discovering clones are being used assassins, a detective must find her own clone to prove she has been framed for murder.
Hope this helps.
“When she is framed for murder, an undercover detective must track down the real assassin, her own clone secretly created by the ruthless corporation behind the conspiracy.”