Jungle fever
When Daniel, a devout christian starts having frequent nightmares, he must locate and destroy a cherished family heirloom buried by his drunken father in a remote village or he loses his sanity
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Mentioning names in a logline is an absolute no no.
I agree with what’s been said before about the logline.
And, as nicholasandrewhalls mentioned, I think the title isn’t helping. For me, it makes me think of either Spike Lee’s film or that 70s song.
I think Monique Mata hit the nail on the head. By just trimming this down it becomes tighter, clearer, more concise. Don’t know that there’s anything more needs to be said.
I’m not crazy about the title.
Your logline’s a little too long; you can definitely trim and punch up some of your word choices. I would think about replacing “Christian” with your protag’s occupation, ie. devout lawyer/professor/etc. Also, think about tying in the christianity element to the types of nightmares he’s having.
My stab at it:
When a devout cryptologist becomes plagued with portentous nightmares about heaven and hell, he must find and destroy a long-forgotten family heirloom before he loses his sanity.