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storyutbildningen
Posted: September 19, 20132013-09-19T23:45:26+10:00 2013-09-19T23:45:26+10:00In: Public

When Ed tries to commit suicide a mysterious stranger shows up and offers him a deal he cannot refuse and when Ed break the deal he has to battle not just himself but other more dark forces as well. /Amanda

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    1. storyutbildningen
      2013-09-20T04:41:38+10:00Added an answer on September 20, 2013 at 4:41 am

      Maybe it’s just me, but I find it a bit unclear exactly what Ed’s goal is and what the stakes are, considering he started on the verge of suicide (how much worse could it get?). I assume the story will reveal all that, but I would like a bit more clarity in the logline. Maybe shorten it down a few words as well? /Kalle

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      2013-09-21T13:57:31+10:00Added an answer on September 21, 2013 at 1:57 pm

      Is this a bit of a Vanilla Sky type film? A guy is offered happiness/a better life in return for…something? I agredd with Kalle. Perhaps define exactly what deal he makes.

      good luck

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