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EethanSamurai
Posted: July 27, 20162016-07-27T18:31:12+10:00 2016-07-27T18:31:12+10:00In: Family

When he invents inter-dimensional video messaging, a friendless whiz kid hides his discovery from his loud and obnoxious adult colleagues to develop a friendship with an alien delinquent in peace (and quiet).

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    1. Dkpough1 Uberwriter
      2016-07-27T20:44:08+10:00Added an answer on July 27, 2016 at 8:44 pm

      “When he invents inter-dimensional video messaging, a friendless whiz kid hides his discovery from his loud and obnoxious adult colleagues to develop a friendship with an alien delinquent in peace (and quiet).”

      Example:?When his inter-dimensional video chat contacts an alien,a nerdy kid must hide his discovery so the alien will continue to be his only friend.?(~24 words.)

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2016-07-28T04:45:32+10:00Added an answer on July 28, 2016 at 4:45 am

      Besides chatting peacefully with an alien, does anything else happen? Does the boy have a goal besides chatting?

      How about something like this:
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      “When his inter-dimensional communication device is stolen by his obnoxious colleague, an introverted scientist must steal it back from a secure underground lab in order to talk the alien friend who he’s fallen in love with.”
      —–

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    3. dpg Singularity
      2016-07-28T09:12:21+10:00Added an answer on July 28, 2016 at 9:12 am

      A premise in search of a plot.

      And what distinguishes this from E.T.? ? I mean there is a slightly different set up, but a similar situation emotional predicament in terms of the kid’s relationship to the alien.

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    4. Knightrider Mentor
      2016-07-28T09:29:42+10:00Added an answer on July 28, 2016 at 9:29 am

      The idea is almost there, but does need something that will bring it out and make it truly different from ET. Seeing as inter-dimensional, would it work being parallel universe, where maybe he befriends an alternate version of himself who has everything, but is wasting potential.

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    5. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2016-07-29T18:26:40+10:00Added an answer on July 29, 2016 at 6:26 pm

      It sounds as if the inciting incident is more the colleague’s discovery of the invention, best to describe it as such in the logline and as it stands now the inciting incident is his inventing the interdenominational? face time.

      Then the MC’s goal can be made to be a reaction to what the colleague does.

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