Logliner
Posted: 2016-05-04T12:02:30+10:00 In:

When he is laid off from his dream job, Joe is surprised to find his major emotion is happiness, so he reviews how he got here to understand why.

When he is laid off from his dream job, Joe is surprised to find his major emotion is happiness, so he reviews how he got here to understand why.
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    4 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      While it’s a comedy, the question that comes to mind is that while he’s ruminating about his emotional response to being laid off from his dream job, doesn’t he also have a mortgage to ?pay? ?Doesn’t he need to find another job ASAP?

      What becomes his objective goal as a result of being laid off?

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    2. Singularity

      As DPG wrote the logline lacks a plot.

      The logline describes a situation that could setup a plot but with out further detail it is vague.

      Also, in most cases, no need for the character name in the logline.

      Checkout the training tab at the top bar for more detail on best practice in writing a logline.

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    3. Mentor

      We have a happy unemployed man who “reviews how he got there to understand why”, this is very low concept (it can be good but it’s very difficult to see in in a logline – I love low concept movies but they can hardly be catched in a logline). Maybe you should focus on a clear goal for the main character and mention the source of conflict.

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    4. Uberwriter

      Watch “LOST IN AMERICA” (1985). ?It is about two high paid exec that sell their house and decide to take the money and move to somewhere… they don’t know where, just out of the rat race.

      Watch that and write a logline for it. ?You’ll see that there is an incident that triggers their decision and is fuelled by the thought of freedom.

      So what does Joe do? ?Write a list? – bit of a boring story. ?Visit friends? – so how does that look.

      You understand. ?Look at the events and challenges her will face. ?Plus Joe may be better as “a man in his forties” or “a workaholic man” , Joe gives us no insight.

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