When Heaven accidentally causes an army of demons to be unleashed on the town of Oceanview, God is forced to visit Earth with disastrous results. Title: God Just Wanted To Play Golf
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When Heaven accidentally causes an army of demons to be unleashed on the town of Oceanview, God is forced to visit Earth with disastrous results. Title: God Just Wanted To Play Golf
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Superman has kryptonite for a reason. You can’t be brave if you are invincible.
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When?God comes to earth; after a bumbling angel accidentally?releases a demon horde, he discovers, on earth, he’s human, vulnerable, and the demon horde must be stopped at all costs.
By reading the logline, I was not certain about:
1. Whether God is supposed to be the main character and
2. The “disastrous results.”
1.
If God is the MC, which God are we talking about? Give Him (or Her?) a personality; a flaw. Richiev suggests Him being human upon arrival to Earth. (It reminds me od Last Action Hero’s Arnie, who discovers that he can’t punch through glass in the real world without getting hurt.
2.
You need to define the “disastrous results.” More specifically, you need to define the Action that drives the movie. If the horde of demons is the antagonism, what must God DO, for an hour or so of the Second Act?
Good points.? God is part of an ensemble cast, as is Death, Lucifer and a bunch of humans.? When God arrives, he finds himself bound by the rules of the bible and humans are unable to look at him, else they explode.? ?God’s flaws are that he is an arrogant CEO who really doesn’t like running Heaven or being around people.
Let’s try that again.
When a clerical error in Heaven causes an army of demons to be unleashed on the town of Oceanview, the citizens find themselves in a fight? for their lives.? Matters worsen when God shows up to help.
However, this goes over the 25 word limit.