Singularity
Posted: 2019-02-01T01:17:08+10:00 In:

When his brother returns after 12 years with the mob on his trail, a shrewd farmer must find a way to take them all out first, whatever the cost.

When his brother returns after 12 years with the mob on his trail, a shrewd farmer must find a way to take them all out first, whatever the cost.
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    4 Reviews

    1. Logliner

      I don’t find this logline interesting except the fact that the protagonist is a?farmer. That too if he somehow uses his farming skills to take out the mob, it will be relevant. Or the idea is to show that he’s a simple?man? The premise sounds routine.

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    2. Singularity

      The story seems to start when the farmer’s brother is threatened. I get that the brother was in danger prior to the start of the story, but from a decision maker’s point of view the story starts when the MC understands that the brother is in danger.

      For example:
      When his brother is threatened by the mob, a shrewd farmer must take out New York’s biggest drug lord to save his family.
      (23 words)

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    3. Uberwriter

      Why is the farmer world weary it would appear the brother is the traveller. That is confusing. If the farmer has been travelling why is that important to the story. You don?t need to add colour for the sake of it, only if it impacts on the story and helps paint a better picture.

      A farmer must take out the mob hitmen that are pursuing his brother that has returned after years on the run.

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    4. Singularity

      Possible Title: Southern Hospitality?

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