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Posted: February 6, 20132013-02-06T04:01:51+10:00 2013-02-06T04:01:51+10:00In: Public

When Jake, the long distance truck driver, returns back home, he discover that 2 years of his life went missing. What had happened since he took a nap during his last shift?

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    1. katiefracas
      2013-02-12T19:09:24+10:00Added an answer on February 12, 2013 at 7:09 pm

      HI Jan,

      your premise is intriguing!

      What I would like to see in the logline is the main action of the story e.g. He must decipher this new future, he must win back the love of the wife that has now moved on, he must find a way back to his own time. Also I think you can save words by losing the last sentence – that question is valid and exciting but already implied.

      How about ‘When a long distance truck driver returns home to find the world has moved on two years without him he must figure out what has happened in his absence’

      You know your story perhaps there is a ticking clock so you could add ‘before he is sucked further into the future and away from his life’ or perhaps there is an antagonist so you could add ‘before his childhood best friend manages to steal away with his wife.’

      Whatever it might be!

      Good luck!

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