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alexiadark
Posted: August 22, 20122012-08-22T17:28:13+10:00 2012-08-22T17:28:13+10:00In: Public

When the son of a billionaire couple is kidnapped during their messy divorce, the ransom is an ultimatum: one parent will get to take their son home – the other must die.

Split

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    1. alexiadark
      2012-08-24T15:00:41+10:00Added an answer on August 24, 2012 at 3:00 pm

      Thanks for the feedback! What do the kidnappers get out of it? That’s a major spoiler, but it is both money-related and very personal. Each parent is told separately about their ‘deal’ with the kidnapper – so as they try to kill each other, they both think that the other one set the whole thing up.

      The title is definitely temporary, just a placeholder.

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    2. sharkeatingman
      2012-08-24T13:27:29+10:00Added an answer on August 24, 2012 at 1:27 pm

      I think the logline is perfect as it stands. Great job, and great concept!

      Geno Scala- judge

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    3. Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai
      2012-08-23T14:42:12+10:00Added an answer on August 23, 2012 at 2:42 pm

      My only criticism would be to adjust the first half “In the midst of a messy divorce, the son of a billionaire couple is kidnapped …” and then continue as normal. It makes the messy divorce feel less tacked on, and keeps the kidnapping and the ransom running from one into the other.
      Having just read Snyder’s chapter on writing a logline, I’d also like to comment that “Split” doesn’t sound nearly violent or aggressive enough to match the logline. It conjures a goofy Adam Sandler comedy (unless that’s what you’re pitching …). I’d suggest reconsidering the title.

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    4. 2012-08-23T07:07:19+10:00Added an answer on August 23, 2012 at 7:07 am

      Great logline!

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    5. aidanthedude
      2012-08-23T00:43:48+10:00Added an answer on August 23, 2012 at 12:43 am

      That’s pretty kickass. I want to see that.

      It’s all there. The only thing I can think of is…What do the kidnappers get out of a billionaire’s dead body? I guess they could just be some real messed up people, or does it tie in with this messy divorce?

      I’m worried that I’m not using the reply function properly as I’ve no real criticism to give here, bloody good job!

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