Posted: 2015-08-14T02:30:08+10:00 In:

When the suicide of Trent Warner is discovered, a group of his friends must fulfill his dying wish by delivering 100 letters he composed before his suicide, in doing so they will discover that Trent Warner?s death is not as simple as the police report makes it out to be.

100 Letters (Drama, Mystery, Thriller)

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    1. Logliner

      Who the hell is Trent Warner?

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    2. Singularity

      It’s not necessary to name a character. And Trent Warner is dead so he’s not the main character.

      Who is the main character? What is his relationship to the deceased (friend, relative)? As a result of the suicide — which seems to be the inciting incident — what does the main character set out to do — what becomes his objective goal? Who opposes him? What’s at stake? These are the questions a logline should answer.

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    3. Uberwriter

      This an ensemble piece and therefore you should look at expressing the aims and changes members of the group go through. Your last line is a little meaningless as a device to explain your story, it is too ambiguous. Not as simple doesn’t mean anything in this context.

      Was his motivation complex, was method different than reported?

      Give it a second go and be more fact based and remove the marketing style. The story should sell itself.

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    4. Samurai

      Yeah I’m gonna have to wait to comment further on this until there’s more story information available. I’m also not sure why you would use a comma in the middle when either a semicolon or new sentence would be appropriate, but it’s far better to shoot for a single sentence needing one comma at the most, and hopefully none.

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    5. Penpusher

      I agree that the name of the Trent Warner character is not so important and shouldn’t dominate the logline. The major conflict is the uncovering of the truth behind his death and this should be the main focus. Love the premise.

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    6. I realized after that I should of left it more open ended and put instead “A man”

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    7. The main characters are the group of friends, that were all best friends with the deceased. Their goal is to deliver the 100 letters he left behind, the opposing force is the fact that he did not commit suicide but was murdered and there is now someone after his group of friends, and the stake is their very own lives.

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    8. Singularity

      You specified that the main characters are the group of friends which means you have a multi protagonist plot. These type of scripts are hard to write and execute well on the page seeing as a single protagonist plot is a feat on its own. I think best to pick one character as the ring leader the head poncho and use that character as the main point of view character to tell the story with.

      The motivation for the characters to deliver letters after their friend dies feels weak and more of a convenience. What is it that happens that, beyond a doubt and without much explanation, motivates someone to need to deliver a bunch of letters?

      The circumstance of the friends death is not an obstacle it is a revelation that could motivate a mid act 2 change of approach but not oppose the characters from achieving their goals.

      I think the concept needs re thinking here are some questions to consider.
      What single character will drive the story and have it be about? What is that character’s clear and well motivated goal?

      Unlike before use these questions as pointers to help with a re draft the logline answering them in a post will likely not be as productive.

      Hope this helps.

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