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Posted: March 23, 20162016-03-23T10:35:46+10:00 2016-03-23T10:35:46+10:00In: Comedy

Zen O’Clock (Pilot) – An office lackey buys an alarm clock possessed with the soul of a world renowned self-help guru and takes advice from it on how to improve his daily life.

Zen O’Clock (Pilot) – An office lackey buys an alarm clock possessed with the soul of a world renowned self-help guru and takes advice from it on how to improve his daily life.
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    1. dpg Singularity
      2016-03-23T22:03:27+10:00Added an answer on March 23, 2016 at 10:03 pm

      As FFF said.? A story is not about the solution, it’s about a problem in need of a solution.? And any solution the protagonist comes up with so early in the story is a false solution.? Even more so when it comes so cheaply, when it is unearned;? all he had to do was unwittingly by a used clock.

      Exactly how does he need to “improve”?his life?? Even if it’s a comedy, he must be in desperate? need of advice to struggle with major life issues that threaten his life, liberty and pursuit of happiness.? And the advice the? Zen O’clock gives must be exactly what he doesn’t want to do, what he doesn’t think he can do.

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      2016-03-23T19:21:20+10:00Added an answer on March 23, 2016 at 7:21 pm

      Hello, in this logline it seems like the main character has zero problems: he finds advice, cool for him, but no conflict=no story. A story is never built on a solution, always about a false solution (or a problem).

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