21 Years and 3 murders later the nightmare ends, and the story of a battered young man can be told.

I think this sets the background of the story up nicely, but doesn't really give a solid indication of what the actual story will be about. Basically, I find it hard to picture just where this story will take me - is it a retelling from the present POV, or is it about moving on from trauma? It could be something else entirely. This is more a teaser than a logline.

21 Years and 3 murders later the nightmare ends, and the story of a battered young man can be told.

The first part of the sentence sounds like a perfect tag line.

This is not a logline, Dr. Lecter... Check out our section on how to write them , then come back and give it another go. It's worth it.

21 Years and 3 murders later the nightmare ends, and the story of a battered young man can be told.

The first part of the sentence sounds like a perfect tag line.

This is not a logline, Dr. Lecter... Check out our section on how to write them , then come back and give it another go. It's worth it.