(5th revision) A half-wolf child causes a corpse to awake, thus disgracing his genie tutor; his redemption happens by learning about the human soul and becoming Anubis, the god of the dead.

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Scott Danzig · Samurai · 1,585 pts

You already have "half-wolf child", and "god of the dead"... I don't think the genie tutor needs to be mentioned.? I think there is a common thread though.? One must properly respect the dead in order to lead them, and defiling/animating corpses is not a good start.? Can the logline just focus on that?? Do we have to mention "learning about the human soul" explicitly?

Neer Shelter · Singularity · 39,985 pts

Is this set in ancient Egyptian mythology, European stories, or Arabian? There appears to be a mishmash of folk tales and mythology that doesn't seem to work.

More to the point, how is causing a corpse to wake an inciting event? This seems rather trivial. Is there a consequence to its waking? Does it hurt someone?

It's not clear how a character can redeem themselves simply by learning about the human soul. Learning can be a part of the redemption process, but after learning, he would have to actually do something to redeem himself.

Lastly, what does learning about the human soul mean?