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There is an obvious problem with structure and logline conventions in the original post. Check out this page for help with lolgline conventions and basic structure:
https://loglines.org/howto/
For the next draft of the logline best to simplify the story to deal with less subject matter, one clear and objective outer journey goal and cause and effect relationship between the inciting incident and the goal.
Hope this helps.
There is an obvious problem with structure and logline conventions in the original post. Check out this page for help with lolgline conventions and basic structure:
https://loglineit.com/howto/
For the next draft of the logline best to simplify the story to deal with less subject matter, one clear and objective outer journey goal and cause and effect relationship between the inciting incident and the goal.
Hope this helps.
"17 year old terrorist Barbara forces the son of the president of the United States to betray his own country and join her on the expedition to find her sister, which leads to the revelation of the grotesque plans the United States (Illuminati) has up its sleeve and the end of everything." I am wondering if this is the logline...with some tweaking as phrases such as "up its sleeve" are too clich? for a logline.... Good luck.
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