A grief-stricken woman takes a cross-country road trip with a little girl she kidnapped to unite her with her father for the child’s protection.

OK uDawnWrite.

It was not a suggestion. This is your story.

Hi Jean-Marie,
I hope I win or at least place too. As far as Celine and Angel, Celine is in her late 30's and Angel's father is mid-20's. I know age is just a number, but I decided not to make this a love story.

I'd like something sparks between Celine and Angel's father.

Hi uDawnWrite

Of course you can use it. And you're right about "sexually".

My pleasure.

Hope you win. Your success will be (a very-very little) ours.

Good luck.

Thanks again, Jean-Marie. I just complimented DPG with his logline before I read yours. I love it! However, I was wondering if I dropped sexually and just used abuse. It may be just me, but do you think people would be turned off by the sexual (child abuse) part of the logline?

Also she's not really estranged from her father, he's not with Angels mother, but close with Angel, he's just in the Military.

"When a grieving mother realizes the little girl she kidnapped is abused, they run away trying to escape pursuers to reunite daughter and father." 24 words

I like it, and I hope you don't mind me using it? I might play around with it and make it my own, but for the most part it's still you.

Thank you, and everyone else above.

Thanks DPG. The part when she decides to reunite her with her father just came to me. Celine's father saved her from the clutches of her mother, so it felt kind of right. Like they say, sometimes the story just writes itself. Also, molestation is the main issue. Celine was molested, and her mother did nothing (revealed near act three).

I'm receiving some pretty good loglines from everyone. I do like the first half of your suggested logline so don't be surprised if I use it. (lol). I do appreciate all the help I'm receiving. My first screenplay received minor attention, so I will take this as a good sign. Wishful thinking perhaps.

Your loglines are very helpful. I haven't started working on it again yet, but I'm saving yours to get an idea. I'm trying to tighten my script one last time before end of weekend, and possibly get an analysis. But thanks again, Valentin.

Thanks again, Jean Marie. Yes I have all the elements that make up the screenplay. The main part of my screenplay take place within a two-three day time period. From the time Angel runs away/is kidnapped, her father is made aware.

Celine does have a husband, but they divorced/separated before daughter was killed, then the husband blamed her for her death.

Angel's mom will win no mother of the year award I can assure you. (lol)

Oh and thanks for finding my story beautiful, I just hope I'm giving it justice (my vision).

When a grieving mother realizes the little girl she kidnapped is sexually abused, they run away trying to escape pursuers to reunite daughter and estranged father.

26 words (if it's right in English of course)