“A group of high school friends must deal with a zombie out break, that they predicted.”

Jack: "This sounds as if the prediction is the important thing. How about ? A group of high school friends predict a zombie outbreak ? with devastating consequences.?

Dave: "How exactly will the school friends 'deal' with the breakout? Would they have guns? Also, who does the story focus on - I can only imagine an ensemble piece but there is usually a main focus in such films. I don't know how important it is that they predicted it either. In the logline I guess the break out is the inciting incident but I don't know where the story will go afterwards."

Phyllis: "Unless this is an hilarious black comedy horror in the tradition of Buffy, I'm not interested. Sounds like an excuse for busty D grade actresses and bimboys with fab pecs - er, on second thoughts..."