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The antagonist is someone who has the ability to control fire, this person killed his parents and made him an orphan.
The Protagonist nearly drowned when he was a child
I'll work more on the end of the logline some more, thanks all for the feedback.
While I love the idea of an "everyman superhero" with a phobia for his own power, I have to agree with holhuds - we kind of need a more specific villain. Otherwise, I quite like this one.
I think you start off with an interesting idea - a janitor with aquaphobia - but maybe you could push that a little further. Like what if he's a pool maintenance man who suddenly becomes aquaphobic? But then it gets too general: 'A malevolent man who wants to see the world burn' is too vague and could possibly be any psychopath. Can you narrow the idea down and give us more of a sense of the what the main action of the story is going to be? Good start, keep going with it!
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