A selfish billionaire businessman went to NYC were he got kidnapped by his opponents, and left to die in a small old room.
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scripts and loglines are written in the present tense because things happen on screen right-now.
Also, stories are about what the lead character must do. Your logline attempt is just a set-up, the story would be about what happens after he is kidnapped.
Here is an example: (Yours would be different)
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"When he is left for dead in a locked room, a kidnapped billionaire must use his childhood skills as a street magician to break from his prison and get revenge on his abductors."
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Hope that helped.
Great comment by Richiev.
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Yours is written in past tense and doesn't work to generate a hook. Write what must be done, why and what will not be achieved or lost if such act is not done.