A young, successful real estate entrepreneur discovers his entire life is controlled by a group of computer programmers.

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Darion · Penpusher · 170 pts

What you have now caught my attention, but, you're lacking more intrigue, antagonism and the goal. You're on the right track, yet halfway done. Revise it and nail it.

ajapplejacks88 · Penpusher · 100 pts

Why are the computer programmers controlling his life? If you don't want to tease that point in the logline, I would at least add an adjective or two to describe the programmers. Are they evil or what?

FFF · Mentor · 8,245 pts

"When a successful real estate entrepreneur discovers his entire life is controlled by a group of computer programmers, he ___________"