After shy high school girl’heart treatment goes wrong and as result she develops supernatural ability of mind control,she must fight to expose the doctor who caused her transformation

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Invincible

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Fma · Samurai · 1,460 pts

INVINCIBLE -?An obese high school virgin with diabetes who stays home all day and plays online chess hones her power of telekinisis until one day she's exposed by the CIA and forced to use her power to help them capture a deadly Russian gang of Mind Terrorists

Richiev · Singularity · 58,825 pts

You need a bigger goal than just to expose the doctor. ?What is the doctors plan? What is his purpose for his experiments? Stopping his plan should be the goal, how about this:
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"After she is tricked into an experimental treatment by a ruthless doctor, a shy student must use her new found abilities to take down the evil scientist and stop his plan to take over the world."
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Obviously I don't know what the doctor plans are in your story's are so in my logline I used the more generic "Take over the world" so your logline would be different in that respect; but the general idea of the logline would be the same

Hope that helped

Foxtrot25 · Mentor · 8,420 pts

If you want the supernatural ability to be a problem for her, then make up a side effect that she must overcome and be specific.